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Girl Alarm Clock by ~darkenedserenity:icondarkenedserenity:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




the sun sets unasked
and rises again without the
caress of
skin.
But I do not

girl alarm clock
timed in the heat of dreams
that make moan and flutter
of stillness

quiver of over-warm flesh
parting lips
smooth inseam of thigh
wake me in the morning

she just barely breathes

kite dreams
pull at her eye strings
make short lashes quiver

a back that reaches for me
while fingers fetal curl
towards the face
and her lips twitch
my name
over and
over

on hot mornings
I watch her naked sleep
©2003-2009 ~darkenedserenity
:icondarkenedserenity:

Author's Comments

to be and to become

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-03-12

Girl Alarm Clock by ~darkenedserenity epitomizes the craft of poetry. These simple, singular moments captured in discrete yet complete descriptions will make you feel as though you're in the same room, absorbing every detail with burning interest. True poetry challenges language and conception, and this piece does not disappoint. (Suggested by ~wu-wei and Featured by `imperfect)

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~jo-kr Jul 18, 2003, 1:07:21 PM
Wow, a very very intimate poem. It just oozes images and senses. The fifth stanza is really quite a work of genius.
:iconjuushika:
~juushika Jul 18, 2003, 5:33:40 PM
smooth inseam of thigh

while fingers fetal curl
towards the face

...your lines just get me.

Beautiful, sensual, and, my god, the diction ... you make every word work for to its fullest potential, and the result is amazing. I love it, and I'm off to take a look at the rest of your work.



--
"To write is to write is to write is to write is to write is to write."
--Gertrude Stein
:iconjuushika:
~juushika Jul 18, 2003, 5:33:51 PM
Forgot to vote...

--
"To write is to write is to write is to write is to write is to write."
--Gertrude Stein
:iconmelodies:
~melodies Jul 18, 2003, 7:07:22 PM
very sensual.... provokes an intense image
:icondewdrops:
~dewdrops Jul 18, 2003, 9:09:36 PM
wow

--
love is the question;
can i be your answer?
:iconskape7:
~skape7 Jul 19, 2003, 3:08:21 AM
OMG There are absolutely no words I can say which will describe the brilliance of that poem. It's...exquisite. There...that's the closest I'm gonna get. :D (Big Grin) +fav
*races off to check out your gallery*

--
"The poet's business is not to save the soul of man, but to make it worth saving" -James Elroy Flecker

"DREAM..CREATE..BELIEVE"-skape7

I have sold my soul to...
:icondark-writing::iconlivingp oetsociety::iconbevelled-edge:
:iconcrimsonlarko:
~crimsonlarko Jul 19, 2003, 5:31:36 AM
Georgous. Sensual. Intimate. The three best words to describe this amazing peice. Very nice stuff. :) (Smile)
:iconduchessofnod:
~duchessofnod Jul 19, 2003, 7:35:06 AM
in love with your emotions, I am.

and your words: "kite dreams/ pull at her eye strings"

(especially those)

you are exceptional.

--
:batty: Katie:butterflytwo:Bug :batty:
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